Sela Locke

Once got most of the nitpicks, and so I will quickly over-view the story... It was certainly good, if not a little too obvious that it's spiralling into a vamp ...

As I read this, my mouth slowly began to edge open, and my hands sort of - fell asleep on the key-board. I was so wrapped up in the story, ...

Alright. Let us plunge into the numerous nitpicks, shall we? Uncle Flynn pat ted me on the back, with ivy growing on its side. I cut out the apostrophe. Not ...

I have three questions that I need you to answer before I can review... Where is the dialogue? Where are the characters? Where is the description? This was - quite ...

Here's the new fad, popping up again and making my eyes ache shamefully. TELLTELLTELLTELLTELLTELLTELL. That is what seems to be everybody's problem these days. Stories lose everything that makes them ...

Definitely needs a proof-read. I know it's fun to make a story about something as enormous a the world ending. I get that, but even so, it's a huge cliche. ...

Okay! That was - interesting. I think you should keep going, and I love your vague descriptions. ;) They're pretty cool. And it seems you found your writing style. =D ...

Before I do the over-view, I'm going to grab a few mistakes. ;) When Red reached her grandmothers’ she felt something was wrong. The door to the cottage was slightly ...

Ooh! So now you're using cliffies too? Cyril reminds me of Jim Carrey mixed up with Kayo. That's just me, though. Or maybe it's not a cliff-hanger, and Raymond is ...

Man, I love your poetry. I remember reading the name of this a long time ago, and it sounded so... mysterious. Really, Smi. With talent like this, it's almost physically ...

Okay, I'm finally getting around to paying you back for your reviews. Since these are all in the same thread, this will be QUITE a long critique, so buckle down, ...

Okay, I'm starting with some random stuffs. But then maybe it was only what he was implying Unless he actually is implying something, wouldn't it be better put as 'But ...

To be honest, it was hard to stay through the duration of this chapter. There's not much description; I have absolutely no idea what any of them look like. However, ...

I have nothing to edit technical-wise, only I see a certain symbolism in this text. Nuuuu. I thought you were over it all. And now you're falling in all over ...

This was an almost exact copy (character wise) of Twilight. I just read it and... whoa. The plot is hardly different, and I just feel like... well, say we'd made ...